Gabrielle Horvath
April 26, 2012
ENGL 1200-078
Tetterton
Final Project
After rereading
several of my blog posts, I found my sentences were really wordy. In some cases
I was able to take out a word or two in order to make it read better, but for
others I had to take out an entire sentence or two and rewrite it from scratch.
The best example of this would be in my blog post about Jason Russell. In the
opening line, I tried to describe what was in the Kony 2012 video but after
reading it again I realized it made no sense. It even confused me! I went back
and changed my opening in a way that would make sense without having to read it
a few times and to one that still expressed my voice and matched with the rest
of the blog. Another thing I noticed I had to change was to include more
details about the media affecting people’s opinions in negative ways. The whole
point of the blog posts were to tell how the media over exaggerates issues and
influences the public’s opinions, but I felt I did not talk enough about it.
Although I did not add giant paragraphs about it, I added in a few sentences
throughout the paragraphs of each blog to make sure I fully explained how the
media is affecting society.
When I first
began English last semester, I struggled with being able to meet the
requirements of length in my papers. I felt I would add in fluff to make the
paper longer even though it did not make sense or was not needed. Now, I think
I do a much better job of organizing my papers and making sure in each
paragraph I talk about ethos and give full examples and descriptions of what I
mean. This allows me to meet the length requirement without having to add in
fake fillers and confuse my audience with details that do not go along with my
main idea. I also think I do a much better job at finding good sources that
have credibility and add ethos to my papers. Instead of picking random websites
that agree with my main points, I search the databases for scholarly writers
and researchers. Not only does this help with my paper’s clarity, but gives me
a lot more to write about.
